Love the effects used for the mess up part. The whole cartoon itself had a disturbing feel to it. I also really like the way you did the who classic cartoon look. But the only problem was that it felt too rushed. Now I like things that don't drag and all but this was honestly too short in my opinion.
But I loved it overall.
Thanks a lot! Glad the effects came out well :) and yeah Skitzo cartoons are always short little clips since the idea behind them is that they are only "scraps" of an old cartoon that was found from the 1920s. I might do a longer one some day though....thanks again!
Like the animation it's pretty good. The art style is so and so because they all look a little kiddy ya know what I mean. So it looks akward looking at characters that look like kids with moustaches and tits.
The coloring looks beautiful to look at. I love what you did with the shading and such. I also never thought I'd hear Spazkid voice acting in an animation. I mean, he's done so in his older stuff and with Psychicpebbles and even the recent two animations he's released. Sooo, yeah. The other guys were pretty good too.
Overall it's great. Nice work, keep it up.
Ha ha the art style is cartoony, not very realistic, I don't go for realism. Though I know I need to improve on making them at least MORE realistic-looking. But thanks.
Lovely animation, nice style of anatomy and the manner of manipulating their looks and also love the shading, too.
I hope that guy's comfortable in there.
Comfortable like Luke in a Tauntaun!
OK, so as far as I can tell, this is based off the DBZ webcomic that I've seen fanart of but have not bothered to read until now.
The story is an interesting concept but for guys like me, a bit of a headache to keep up with. The whole different universe thing really annoys me because it can get really confusing.
As for the flash itself, as good as the animation was, it probably needed a bit more because it felt like some scenes were traced over and had animation added to it like the VGCats comics that were being uploaded here. I even noticed a few errors here and there like when you see the shot of Goten and Trunks talking to the aliens, the hands looked messed up a bit. Which is why tracing doesn't do much good, especially when you add more to it. I mean, there was an old Kingdom Hearts manga animation adaptation that did the same thing and everything looked so poorly animated. Which is why when a comic should be adapted to animation, I think trying to animate panels should be done the same way most manga to anime adaptations do it, from what I noticed. Try having more than just characters standing there. I think adding a little more than what actual comic suggests is a great idea.
As for the music, sure it was remixed but it was fitting. But, I don't think you'll have your animation taken down for copyright laws and such mainly because your not using it for profit. Plus, many DBZ animations from 2003 and later have done it and they're still on the site up until now. So, I don't think you'll get in trouble.
Anyway, this was good for a nostalgia trip (seeing that I haven't seen much of DBZ in a while) and I noticed some improvement. Keep it up and good luck with finding voice actors.
much appricate for your critic!
here some replies:
"Try having more than just characters standing there. I think adding a little more than what actual comic suggests is a great idea." the thing you try to point out here is called "Filler". and filler is hated. episode 2 have more action on it. not like this one only standings around (even i didn like that myself).
about audio. yeah. maybe its ok to do it here in NG. but what about Youtube? YT is copyright claims in person!
i guess i will add voice actors into EP2.when i found some X_x
Darker than your usual stuff. I wonder what influenced this.
I like your art, it's cute, cartoony and simplistic. Though your animation might need some work. Now your animation is good here and there. But you might need to work a bit more on the movements like with the arms and heads. I say this because with head movements I noticed the character's head all of a sudden got smaller than it originally was. Consistency is a must. Also, the hands and feet of the humans looked kinda weird at some point. Might need to work on the body. Now anatomy study might not really involve cartooning much but it does help improve the sizes of certain body parts like the hands, fingers, legs, etc. I mean most cartoonists and animators study the anatomy and how it moves before developing their style even further. I should know because I'm practicing my animation and anatomy myself here and there.
As for the plot of the flash, it felt like just random killing and didn't have much of a point to it. Sure, we can kind of interpret the situation here. She's a fox that's basically going after hunters who kill foxes for fur. But I think a bit more can be added to this. More of a story and maybe make it a bit more dramatic. I mean, I like the idea as it's a pretty darn good one. But you might need to try to get some help with more than one person to try and help expand the writing a bit more.
As for the music, it was pretty much suitable and I didn't have any problem with it. But the rock musi c might be only good for the intro but more suspenseful music (minus the singing) can also help set the mood. I mean look at many of the disney films and even animated films from Ralph Bakshi, Brad Bird, Pixar, etc. They all have the appropriate music for the appropriate setting. I mean you could try to use some action music BGM and there are some instrumental songs here on Newgrounds that you could use as well. Sorta like what you did for the Bigger Fish to Fly.
Overall, this was decent to watch. I really liked the darker turn for your stuff. Shows that you have quite a variety in your stuff. Keep it up, dude.
PS:- Hope this was helpful, cuz I might not sound all that helpful but I'm trying.
Thats alright, thanks for the input! This short was based on a more drama orientated script me and a friend worked on last year. But unless I can hire a whole team to make it (and it'd be longer than a couple of minutes) it isn't likely to happen.
Well hey.
I'm noticing some improvement. Love the animation here as you did a great job with the movement and the tweening doesn't look all that bad. I think you did a great job with the lip syncing and the walking animation. But it could use a bit more work here and there. For example the head turning animation and when a pony moves his or hooves. Maybe you could use HotDiggedyDemon's style of animation as while he does tween his animations, his frame by frame animation is actually pretty good.
I also knew I'd recognized that sound clip as it came from something I watched on Youtube. Timing and everything is perfect.
The art work looks great. Accurate as it does look like it came from the show. Background looks pretty good and well stylized. I also like the way the contraption that Doctor Whooves tries to hold looks. It looks pretty well drawn or traced, not sure what to call it.
Overall this does look potentially good. I liked what I saw. Keep it up, man.
Almost all of this was done frame by frame (with the exception of the backgrounds and tardis). and the screwdriver was indeed traced and "cartoonized"
To be honest, this wasn't funny at all.
The tweens were horribly done and they just looked so lifeless. I mean, you've been animating for a while now. Why give us something that a beginner dishes out. Try some more f-b-f practice or if you wanna try tweening, practice tweening in a way that does make it look lazy.
The voices were terrible. Now, I could care less about the accent as that doesn't bother me. The emoting could have, however been better than it was. Also, Ricepirate was slightly annoying in this movie. I'm not a big fan of his and to be honest his voice didn't go well with the animation.
Also, the idea was just nonsensical. Everything was just too random and out of place, like the yugioh joke.
Also, the music usage was also random. None of them fit the situation. For example, the Pokemon Ruby and Sapphire battle music wasn't needed for when Swiper goes insane.
Overall, you have a long way to go my friend. Tutorials and practice are a must here.
first of all: that was flash is a joke itself, in other words, i made this on purpose NOT like my normal animation style . normaly i dont do everything with tweens. im more Frame By Frame Friend.
i hate tweens myself. you should know More about me befor critic me about 1 animation.
Second: if you didn like voices! thats your problem! we dont share the same taste of audio. its better so , i mean if we were all the same, that would be boring as hell...
Third: that was just an idea came out of my head as i was in college. i actuarly was aware that i wont be funny. since your fools ALL have that disgutsting taste of humor of tapeworms in ass or bisual sexual rape or the best one COCK JOKES! pffff...
im not funny and im ok with it.
Fourth: thers a billion Musics in NG audio portal! its not easy to find the best ones without help so easy.and besides as i said in above. we all dont share the same taste of audio! like it .like it | dont like it. dont like it .
so overall: your critic is plain and effectless since this is not even my REAL style at all!
but on the turorial things...im allready ON on that
cheers
I'm a guy who's been a big fan of Newgrounds since the mid-2000s and is happy to share his art with this community and meet new people.
Age 32, Male
Joined on 9/29/11
Skitzo-"Puppy Love" 
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Dragon Ball Multiverse 1 
Vixen With A Shotgun 
Dr Whooves and Assistant 
Dora VS Swiper 
